After eating a combo #1 with coke last night I felt as though I had a perfect opportunity to capture "fast food" in a unique way. Any feedback would be appreciated.
Flipped.
A second application of the theme. Comments and criticism would be appreciated, class participation here people.
Flipped.
Flipped.
A second application of the theme. Comments and criticism would be appreciated, class participation here people.
Flipped.
I like the concept. I see were your going, with this. would like to see more, it seems more top heavy, A-symmetrical vantage point would be an option.
ReplyDeleteGeo
I like the concept as well. I think I just would have loved to see, as gross as this sounds, little drops or spittle of something (I think its puke?) on the seat just to sort of break up the heavy white line. Just a suggestion.
ReplyDelete- Jordynn Colosi
Perfectly gross, man. I really like the idea, but I will agree that I'm not a huge fan of this exact composition, but I still like hw you see just a BIT of what's in the toilet. Maybe even try flipping the image vertically, so that the toilet is on the bottom of the image. When I look at it like that I think my eye leads down to the toilet better, and it is almost like the view you saw just moments before. Just my opinion on the composition, but nevertheless sick idea.
ReplyDeleteThanks for the comments guys. Its nice to hear what other eyes see. It is actually shit that is in the toilet, Jordyn. I like the idea of turning the picture around so the toilet is on the bottom, i just st flipped my phone to see how it worked. I have a diptych that consists of this photo accompnied by one of what is in the toilet, super gross but it hits the nail on the head that much more. Without offending to many people I hope to show that as my next draft. Thoughts?
ReplyDeleteThrow up the diptych, those who are easily offended are in the wrong field.
ReplyDeleteIt will be up tomorrow morning.
ReplyDeleteRank, I think I can smell it from here. I like the shock factor the diptych adds too, but personally my favorite is the single image of the flipped toilet. I just keep getting the idea that it's "my" view looking down at what I've just "done". I'm interested to hear what other people think!
ReplyDelete-Matt
Definitely like the first diptych the best with the toilet at the top. I agree with Matt. It gives the feeling of looking down on it afterwords. Totally disgusting though, I love it:)
ReplyDelete- Jordynn Colosi
Diptych number two (pun heartily intended) is my favorite. But what is that blue stuff in the toilet? It looks nice but I can't figure out what it is.
ReplyDeleteEven though I like the second diptych the best right now I'd be interested in seeing a vertical arrangement of the first toilet bowl picture you posted above or below the image of the toilet innards. Having the bowl at the top of the frame reminds me of that second before you realize the stall you were intending you do your business in is in fact full of someone elses shit. We've all been there right? I know that might not be the wisest advice compositionally speaking but I think it'll add to the narrative aspect of the shot. The flipped version of the toilet bowl might be more pleasing to the eye at first but it lacks the pull forward that the first one possess. As gross as it may be I want to see what's in the bowl in the first shot whereas in the second shot I feel like my eye is being lead away from the toilet and out of the bathroom to a more sanitary place.
That's a lot to dump on you but I hope it's helpful.
What blue stuff Paige?
ReplyDeleteIt's poop. My bad.
DeleteThe toilet and the shit is very pushing the envelope. The shock value will def grant you points, I have to agree with Mat, if it offends well then my suggestion is that you made a good image that thought provokes. I don't know about the dual images, the poop in the toilet makes a strong statement all on its own, however they do compliment each other.
ReplyDelete- side note would be good to hear were you were going with it, besides the obvious shock value. all I am saying , and don't take offense, is knowing what your motivation would come a long way in description. if not it just says it all :O)